Johns Hopkins HealthCare, LLC

www.hopkinsmedicine.org

Mission:

To develop and manage medical care contracts with organizations, government programs, and health care providers for over 250,000 plan members.

Services:

Perform substantive editing, copyediting, and proofreading of marketing collateral for the Marketing & Communications Department, including:

  • Newsletters
  • Annual reports
  • Patient guides
  • Posters
  • Stacked inserts, brochures, and flyers
  • Guides, directories, and handbooks
  • Internal planning documents

Johns Hopkins Whiting School of Engineering Development Office

eng.jhu.edu/wse/page/alumni-friends-new

Mission:

To support the constituencies of the Whiting School of Engineering and secure financial resources required to fulfill the school’s mission through communications, fund development, and donor stewardship.

Services:

  • Worked with capital campaign committee to develop documents outlining committee structure, roles, and duties.
  • Drafted case statement for planned fundraising campaign for new cancer oncology center.
  • Worked with team of JHU fundraisers to prepare a transformational gift strategies report and presentation documents.

WTEC, Incorporated

www.wtec.org

Mission:

WTEC is the national leader in conducting international technology assessments.

Services:

Provided a wide range of editorial support services for WTEC’s international technology assessment conferences and proceedings:

  • Ghostwriting
  • Abstracts and summaries
  • Recording and transcription
  • Copyediting and substantive editing
  • Research and analysis

Provided staff support services for monthly meetings of the Multi-Agency Tissue Engineering Science Interagency Working Group (under WTEC contractor support agreement):

  • Recording and preparation of meeting minutes
  • Writing and editing website content, designing web pages, and performing site maintenance
  • Monitoring science and medical journals, news sites, press releases, and custom search alerts for news of interest; writing and posting abstracts regularly to the working group’s website
  • Maintaining the website’s events calendar of upcoming international scientific conferences

On-site reporting duties:

  • Preparing and editing meeting summaries
  • Writing and editing summaries of international research assessment interim and final meetings

Pro Bono Writing and Editing

Maryland Writers’ Association

www.marylandwriters.org

Editor and designer, Pen in Hand. Sample clips:

  • Spring 2012 (PDF)
  • Winter 2012 (PDF)
  • Fall 2011 (PDF)
  • Summer 2011 (PDF)
  • Spring 2011 (PDF)
  • Winter 2011 (PDF) (plus Special Bylaws Supplement (PDF))

Editor, Keyboard in Hand, the MWA newsblog

Canton Community Association

www.cantoncommunity.org

Acting webmaster; features/news editor and writer, Canton Connection Online community newsblog (now defunct) ; Editor, The Canton Connection. Sample clips:

  • Summer 2006 (PDF)
  • Spring 2006 (PDF)
  • Winter 2006 (PDF)
  • Fall 2005 (PDF)
  • Summer 2005 (PDF)
  • Spring 2005 (PDF)

Friends of the Canton Library

www.cantoncommunity.org/content/friends-canton-library

As Secretary, drafted meeting minutes, updated and maintained Friends webpage, created marketing materials, and wrote ad copy for fundraising events.

Takoma Park-Silver Spring Food Co-op

www.tpss.coop

Editor, TPSS Cooperative Effort News. Ghostwrote the regular “Comment Corner” and “Featured Employees” columns, plus “Upcoming Events” and other sidebars. Sample clips:

  • August/September 2004 (PDF)
  • Special Issue, June 2004 (PDF)
  • April/May 2004 (PDF)
  • February/March 2004 PDF)
  • December 2003/January 2004 (PDF)
  • October/November 2003 (PDF)
  • Special Bylaws Issue, October 2003 (PDF)
  • August/September 2003 (PDF)

Paul Lagasse has also been published in Artella: The Waltz of Words and Art, As the Eraser Burns . . . , Aviation History, Bay Weekly, Boys’ Quest, Encyclopedia of American Business History (2005 ed.), HAIlights, HAIpoints, Library Matters (University of Maryland), and Pen in Hand. He has had reviews published on H-Net and The Potomac.

United States Naval Institute

www.usni.org

Mission:

To provide an independent forum for the professional, literary, and scientific understanding of sea power, the advancement of the naval profession, and the preservation of US naval history.

Services:

Provide on-site reporting and same-day summary preparation for USNI conferences, including:

Prepare summaries of keynote presentations, individual and panel sessions, including quotes from speakers. Edit summaries and provide same-day turnaround of edited manuscripts for posting on the conference website.

Science and Technology Policy Institute

www.ida.org/stpi

Mission:

A federally funded research and development center (FFRDC) operated by the Institute for Defense Analyses, STPI provides high-quality research and analysis to the White House Office of Science and Technology Policy (OSTP), including copyediting, substantive editing, technical writing, and research and analysis.

Services:

Provided writing and editorial services to STPI to help it fulfill its research mandate to its clients.

Co-author:

  • “Preliminary Findings from the NSF Survey of Object-Based Scientific Collections: 2008” (academia.edu)

Editorial support for reports and publications, including:

  • Writing first drafts of sections, chapters, and appendices
  • Substantive editing of early drafts
  • Proofreading of final drafts
  • Preparation and formatting of reference lists
  • Development and maintenance of word lists, style guides, and citation formats
  • Review of statistical data, charts, tables, and graphics
  • Research of source material
  • Verification of citations and references

Various on-site reporting and minutes preparation duties, including:

  • Preparing and editing meeting summaries and reports for project team meetings
  • Writing and editing on-site reports of interagency working group meetings, committee meetings, conferences, and other events

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